额.我想写首英文的爱情诗

额,我正在写,,正在百度各种英文单词,, 已经百度出 today   moon flower sunshine等难记的单词

Today I miss you,         //今天我思念你
Just like a flower needs sunshine,//正如一朵花需要阳光
Empty land needs timely rainfall.//干涸的大地需要甘霖
I need you. //我需要你
Time is coming, //时间已经来临
when the moon break dark clouds' shroudedm,//当月亮突破乌云的笼罩
这是刚写的一部分,但是不知道语法有什么错误,大家帮忙看一下

The sky was full with holy lonely light.//圣洁的光芒布满星空

You have captured me,//你俘虏了我的心

great curb chain fetters me.//伟大的锁链把我禁锢
(我感觉这句很不对劲,我是用单词拼起来的)

Unstruggled,why struggle?//无法挣脱,为什么挣脱?
(问;struggle有挣脱的意思吗.前面能加UN吗)

Angel's song run upon,//天使的圣音萦绕耳间
(是不是要用running啊)

The innocent and lovely soul root in my soul.//充满天真的灵魂植根于我的灵魂

It's so far you leave me.//你离我是如此的远

But day and day in my dream.//但是每天出现在我的梦中

回复：5楼
应该是shrouded,或者shroud

Today I miss you,//今天我思念你
Today I need you.//今天我需要你
An eyesight let me ntoxicated,//一个眼神令我沉醉
A smile make me dance.//一个微笑使我舞蹈
Even time flise,//即使时光飞逝
We are both aging.//我们都变老了
You are always my angel in my heart.//你永远是我心中的天使...
(就这样吧,写的越多,错的越多)

终于写完了...游戏区了